[The Prince of Magic] - 1. A Basic Grimoire

[The Prince of Magic] - 1. A Basic Grimoire

Cby corejanjanLast updated June 25, 20261,198 words
InkedFantasySupernaturalHigh FantasySword & SorceryComing of AgeYoung Adult

Ceres knocked once, then gently pushed the wooden door open. As the soft bell chime rang out, he was met with large shelves of grimoires stacked together in a neatly arranged area. Various trinkets were encased in glass storages, and vials of potions, as well as other magical items were also on display.

He caught his breath, lungs filled with awe and wonder, while his eyes clearly sparkled at the sight of the various magical items a village boy like him had long been wanting to see.

It was the kind of place he used to dream about.

Fingering the drawstring of his pouch, he pulled out a single gold coin. It was the gold coin that he earned from saving for over half a year. Where he had put his hope to finally get started on learning magic.

With a determined breath, Ceres approached the grimoire shelf and found the cheapest option. [An Introduction to Mana Application]

‘I’m really doing it,’ he thought, a smile tugging at his lips.

The shopkeeper was already watching him by the time he reached the counter.

“Just this one, please.” Ceres muttered and slid the gold coin towards the shopkeeper.

“Oh? Another aspiring mage.” Her tone curled with amusement, eyes half-lidded in disinterest.

Ceres blinked. “Is there… something wrong?”

“Not really, though I should probably give you a word of advice.” Her aura shifted, her playful tone losing its airy edge. “The magic world is vast. If you think that cheap grimoire would somehow solve your problems, you might want to reconsider.”

‘She probably met her fair share of so-called “aspiring mages” only to be disappointed.’ Ceres sighed at the thought. Still, he nodded. “Thanks. I’ll make sure to keep that in mind.”

“No refunds,” her tone was now lifted once again, grinning.

Ceres slipped the grimoire into his bag and turned to leave.

“Ah—and also…” she called out, just as his hand touched the door.

“Yes?”

“Don’t cause trouble. Magic’s still regulated, so don’t use it too carelessly.”

“Understood.”

The door closed behind him.

~

Ceres returned to the inn. His hands were still slightly trembling. Excitement coiled in his chest, quiet and warm. ‘I can finally start learning real magic… and maybe start earning more too.’

While Ceres was making enough money through the various odd jobs he had been taking since coming to Reine, he had yet to find a stable income. Being a village boy limited his opportunities to go for a higher paying job.

And being a mage would help a lot with his current situation. Besides, he enjoyed learning, and from the little he heard about it, magic seems to be just about that.

He dropped his bag on the bed and pulled out the grimoire. The leather felt rather stiff, while the title seemed to be carved, as opposed to the embossed finish that skilled magic artisans used in binding grimoires.

He sat at the desk, opened to the first page, and began to read.

Chapter I - The Nature of Mana

Mana is the cornerstone of magic. Its omnipresence allowed our ancestors to survive. The substance of the natural world that sparked the birth of civilization…

The first few pages were dense with historical information and cultural definitions of magic. There were also details about different interpretations of mana and sentiments across the different villages and tribes. These were as such categorized as folk magic, most of which originated from different parts of the continent before magic was formally institutionalized.

His eyes followed each line with care, while his fingers brushed gently under the words.

And then came the part that truly caught his attention.

…where mana gathers, properties “change.” It is as much a conduit of “transformation” as it is a force.

‘Doesn’t this mean that mana is reactive then?’ Ceres thought.

…Mana can be described in two ways: by its source and by its behavior, which is either Active or Passive, while its source is split into Internal and Ambient Mana; one generated by living beings, and the other being innate from the surrounding environment.

The next few pages were diagrams of the universal flow of mana, and its various effects on the environment.

‘I mean, the theory makes sense. Mana is everywhere after all, and it’s not like Reine has a shortage of magical developments to flaunt to its citizens.’

Ceres suddenly remembered the first time he saw the towering walls of the city. The scholar who accompanied him inside the public carriage wouldn’t shut up. Rambling endlessly about the details of the magical enchantments on the walls that somehow makes it more durable, as long as ambient mana passes through it over time.

As he turned to the next few pages, it became clear to him why certain cities like Reine had flourished. The idea that some regions were abundant in ambient mana meant that mages would be more encouraged to stay in the city, taking advantage of its high concentration for training and other purposes.

…Mana, whether Active or Passive; Internal or Ambient, is a substance that has an inherent flow. Understanding this flow is the true key to perceive it. Only by knowing its nature may one truly begin to have an intuitive understanding of mana.

Ceres took a deep breath. The first chapter had ended there. A part of him became heavier, another part, lighter.

‘Flow…’ He lingered for a moment, gently letting go of the book. He left it open, but he looked up at his ceiling, looking at his blurry shadow, fluctuating in sharpness as the candlelight danced.

‘Of course… flow.’

Without hesitation, he picked up the book again, turning the page to the next chapter.

‘It’s here…’

Chapter II - Mana Perception

To sense mana is to sense the world, perception lies not on the truth of others, but in the truth you possess. Magic is the language of reality, and mana is its underlying voice. Mages draw meaning through it, and it all begins on the instance you finally become aware of its presence.

‘In the truth I possess…’

Ceres stared at the candlelight, quietly observing for a few seconds. Its small flame swayed ever so slightly…

‘It’s practically begging to be touched.’

He lifted his finger and brought it closer to the light. As it approached the candlelight, a small wave of piercing agony tormented Ceres. It was sharp, as if a small needle went through his head in a split second. Ceres jolted from his seat and held his head tightly with his arms.

His vision started to blur, until there was nothing.

~

A few minutes later, Ceres woke up.

Something has changed.

Everything was exactly the same, and yet entirely different.

The world was brighter, more… vivid?

No, it wasn’t quite that.

It felt like a whole new eye, a whole new ear, a whole new system of senses. A sense that had no name, but a sense that can also never be forgotten.

‘So this is what sensing mana is like…’

Ceres smiled faintly, still trying to make sense of the new world he had stepped in.

‘I did it finally… I can sense magic.’

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??6/17/2026(edited)

This story is really good! The sections about the way of mana were very well written and interesting to read. One thing that I think you could improve on is to lessen some of the explaining you do in the story. For example, this sentence reads: “While Ceres was making enough money through the various odd jobs he had been taking since coming to Reine, he had yet to find a stable income. Being a village boy limited his opportunities to go for a higher paying job.” This begins to read a little explanatory rather than communicating the information through things like action, dialogue, or emotion. I’m not saying you have to change this, though, just that it’s something to keep in mind for the future. Trust the reader to understand that Ceres is poor and is unable to keep a steady income, as well as a steady job, and only explain things that they wouldn’t be able to figure out themselves or conclude by themselves without a bit of information from the writer. Another piece of advice I have is to give Ceres more of a reaction when he wakes up. Can he see at first? Do his new senses overwhelm him in the beginning? Add sensory details to ground the reader in what he’s feeling the moment he comes back to consciousness. What exactly is different this time than before, now that he can sense mana? Also, you can write in if he’s feeling happy, or awed, or in shock, maybe. Just small things to really dive the reader into his perspective can help invest people into Ceres’s story a lot. But other than that, i don’t really have any more comments. This story was a blast to read, and with a few tweaks, I think it could become even better than this. Great job, and keep writing!

??6/25/2026(edited)

I love the book snippets and I love how reflective he is as he reads. As a reflective reader myself, I can see how this helps him absorb the complex material, as he's essentially going to be a self-taught mage. ‘In the truth I possess…’ Also, the way he reaches out to touch the flame suggests he's already living in the truth he possesses, the same truth that has led him from being a village boy with a dream, to a village boy with a gold coin that took him half a year. His choice at the store, although an economic decision comes across to me as him living in "the truth he possesses. He doesn't let the words of the shop keeper deter him from what he has determined to be the next step in his magical journey. The shopkeeper is an interesting character. I wonder if she's a mage herself or just someone who thinks magic is amusing and doesn't care enough for it beyond the profit she can make from aspiring mages. I wonder whether he has something powerful in him that's guiding him towards the choices he's making. Someone has mentioned using action to move the plot forward, but I think being in his head works as well (although that is heavily subjective because I love stories that put me in the characters' internal space. I'm assuming you wrote with a word limit. The pacing is a bit fast, especially with how he began to sense magic. I think a few mistakes or attempts to make the mana flow would work. Like a gradual awakening to how the air moves in his body when he breathes. Still, I would not dismiss the story. I can see the potential it has to become a really engaging long-form story.

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